Melophobia wrote: 522q4p

sorry for the delay

[General]
videoの容量が12.7MBとShort譜面にしてはかなり大きいので最低でも10MB以下に変更で fixed
無音のNormal-sliderslide追加　(Easyの00:47:679 (2) - とかがかなり煩いので) fixed
タイミングにやや不安が残ります、特に 00:08:439 - など～ Easy Hardは修正しました～

[Easy]
00:00:630 - sliderslideが煩いのでsamplesetをC:1に fixed
00:04:596 (3) - 始点whistle fixed
00:06:580 (1) - 音聞く感じ00:08:687 - の方が音が大きいので
そっちで終わらせる方が適切だと思います fixed
00:12:332 (1) - このnote本当に必要ですか？　最低難易度で1/2rhythmは避けたいし
clapもあんまり合ってません　後続がsliderなので1.5rhythmも経験則上問題ないと思います fixed
00:14:902 (3,4) - 1.5rhythmなのでsliderに置き換えた方が初心者には易しいです fixed
00:17:473 (2) - 00:12:332 (1) - に同じ fixed
00:20:472 (1) - 赤線→白線のrhythmは単発だとやや難しいのと
drumの音を拾う意味でもこのnoteを00:20:044 - からのsliderに変えちゃうのがベターだと思いますここはこのままで！
00:21:115 (3) - 00:21:972 - と聴き比べても強さに大きな違いがないので始点もfinishで fixed
00:23:043 - 曲調的に70%は大きすぎ、50%くらいで十分かと fixed
00:33:326 (3) - ちょっとvocalに合ってないと思います　こんな感じで↓ fixed

00:36:753 - 音量60% fixed
00:38:467 (2) - 始点whistle fixed
00:40:181 (1) - whistle fixed
00:41:895 (3) - 始点whistle fixed
00:43:180 - 良く聞いてみるとfinishの音がなってるのでここはnote合った方がいいかな fixed hitsoundは何もつけませんでした！
00:43:608 (1) - 始点&終点whistle fixed
00:47:036 (1) - ここにnormalのhitsoundは合わない　softのwhistleの方が合うかな fixed
00:50:464 - 音量70% fixed
00:51:321 (3) - 00:51:963 - の音を拾いたいのでこのsliderを1/2短くここはこのままで！
00:53:891 (1) - finishはなんていうか大げさです　whistleで十分 fixed
00:53:891 (1,2,3) - どちらかというと00:54:534 - 、00:54:962 - 、00:55:391 - の音を拾いたいここはこのままで！

01:08:458 (3) - 始点&終点whistle fixed
01:10:172 (5) - whistle fixed
01:11:029 (1) - 始点&終点whistle fixed
01:12:529 (3) - ^ fixed
01:15:956 - ここに音が欲しいから(4)をここからstartで
終点は01:16:813 - 。もし可能なら2,3をslider1個に纏めると初心者にも1/2叩きやすくなると思う 両方とも修正しました！
01:19:598 (3) - 終点whistle fixed
01:22:169 (3) - 始点whistle fixed
01:23:026 (4) - ^ fixed
01:23:883 (5) - ^ fixed
01:24:740 (1) - ^ fixed
01:25:596 (2) - ^ fixed
01:26:668 (3) - finish fixed
01:27:524 (1,2) - switch newcombos fixed
01:29:881 (5) - 始点whistle fixed
01:33:523 (2) - ここにnormalは合わないような・・最低でもfinishは外すべき softにして音量をすこしあげました！
01:35:022 (1,2) - この2つのsliderの置き方がちょっと美しくない fixed
01:36:522 (2) - 始点whistle fixed
01:38:236 (2) - 始点&終点whistle fixed
01:40:592 (3,4) - 1.5rhythmはちょっと難しいのでsliderに変更 fixed
01:43:377 - に音が欲しいので(3)をここからstart　終点は01:44:234 - fixed
01:44:234 - ここにも音が欲しいです 上でここのおとがあるのでこのままで！


[Hard]
00:00:630 - samplesetをC:1に fixed
00:06:580 (1) - Easyに同じ fixed
00:21:115 (6) - 終点のfinishはあわないです fixed
00:23:044 (2) - 始点finish?最低でもwhistle fixed
00:38:254 (5) - このwhistleはちょっと違和感ある　置くなら次のsliderの始点にpianoの音があるのでそっちで fixed
00:39:967 - ^ fixed
00:41:681 (4) - ^ fixed
00:53:249 (5,6) - このjumpはあんまり合ってないし読みにくいようなここはこのままで！
00:53:892 (1) - finishはおおげさです、whistleで十分 fixed
01:05:674 (1,2,3) - Spinnerの後に1/2間隔で3連打はHardにしてもかなり難しいです
最低でも1/4のkickに置き換えた方がベター 連打を消して見ました
01:19:598 (1) - 終点finish fixed
01:22:597 (4,5) - んーまぁ音にはあってるけど若干読みにくいしもしここにjump置くなら01:23:884 (3,4) - にも置くべき fixed
01:29:882 (5) - 始点finish fixed
01:47:447 (2,3,4) - 一応1.4xの範囲内なんだけどspacingが不揃いで美しくない fixed

good luck anyway~

BakaHuang wrote: 1m3h5h

D.N.Angel

音效不够饱满 我来补充点 不喜欢就无视吧=w=

00:10:189(2)-add clap
00:11:046(1)-^
00:11:903(1)-^
00:14:474(2,4,5)-白线上加clap
00:17:045(3)-^
00:17:901(1)-^
00:18:758(5)-^

以后clap多加点在白线上XD 后面也是啦 多加点 会让map更有感觉啦 ~

no kds

ouranhshc wrote: 1s59a

How does this timing sound:
First offset: 624
2nd timing section: 140.040bpm offset: 8433
3rd timing section: 140.040bpm offset: 9289

D.N.Angel
00:06:084 (4) - i don't see a reason for this jump //follow the vocal. well,I think it is not too sudden for players
01:21:214 (Kiai) - Add kiai here so that it is consistent with the other diffs //I want to keep this cuz it is good to me
01:47:195 (1) - remove new combo //I don't want to do that cuz it is to be emphasis

ouranhshc wrote: 1s59a

How does this timing sound:
First offset: 624
2nd timing section: 140.040bpm offset: 8433
3rd timing section: 140.040bpm offset: 9289

sorry.. keep offset

Folder looks good
Good Luck

meiikyuu wrote: 1c6x6x

Rare's Normal
00:23:686 - add note? (so that it fits the note rhythm of 00:25:185 (2) - and 00:26:470 (1,2) - )
01:23:026 (3) - add whistle at beginning of slider
01:48:090 (3) - add a reverse to the slider? it also fits the tune but just a suggestion

meiikyuu wrote: 1c6x6x

feel free to ignore anything u don't like

Easy
00:36:753 (1) - imo, instead of the clap at the end, try a whistle? the clap sounds a little loud at that spot o.o
00:38:467 (2) - ^
that's it i guess lol

no change ><

Hard
00:47:036 (3) - add whistle at beginning of slider?
i like the hitsounds ^^ thanks ^^
fixed
very nice map, hope it gets ranked soon~

xsrsbsns wrote: 2u6f59

00:08:687 (1,2) - These objects timing don't match the BGM (can hear especially the repeating sliders), I believe it's already in fast BPM part

Please try this (it really works best for me)

#1 120.00 BPM - 630
#2 140.00 BPM - 8476 (end of spinner beat here) added
#3 140.00 BPM - 9333

Here's DNA diff with changed red lines for preview http://puu.sh/Fvlr

can't wait for rank ><

Sherry wrote: 65n6u

[Hard]

00:10:189 (3) - 00:10:832 (5)
(3)(4)の単発の次に強調の(5)きていて、さらに(5)(6) と (7)(8)が同じ表現なので　(3)-(6)の間で若干の違和感が生じています。
(5)あたりにnew combo　を使うか　ジャンプ　もしくは別の表現にするといいかもしれません。
とてもいい提案ですが、Hardということで、保留にしておきます。今後mapを作成する際に参考にしたいと思います！

00:22:400 (1) - 00:26:256 (5)
00:23:686 色が同じのせいか　ジャンプしてないからか、　(4)の終端と (5)の位置が方向的にあっていないからか違和感があります。
00:24:114 (5) で new combo し、00:25:185 (1)で new comboを消すとかでもいいかもしれません
DSのとおり置いているので no changeで。

すべて細かく見れてないですけど気になったところはこんな感じです。
全体的に盛り上がり度50～60をいったりきたりするような平坦的な印象を受けたので
ヒットサウンド等でもう少し盛り上がり感を出してもいいかもしれませんｗ (finishする場合を少し大きくするとか?)
強調させるところを10%上げました！

。・・）っ☆　十分良いマップだと思います　星つけといきますね　

MiLu wrote: 3a32m

[Rare's Normal]
00:06:130 (2) - remove whistle? このままで
00:22:186 - 不要な緑線 消した
01:31:380 - 音が欲しい気もします うーん　保留で
01:36:308 (3,4,5) - こうとか？ http://puu.sh/G2Gm これだと5は要らないかも・・・？ (3)をスライダーにした！
01:48:090 (3) - 01:48:518までスライダー伸ばしてもいいかも？かもです　かもね　今のままのほうが良い気も(=.=) 終点にwhistleつけるの忘れたのでそこだけ><

MiLu wrote: 3a32m

[D.N.Angel]
00:21:972 (5) - add whistle? //good idea,added ~
01:14:243 (1) - RNC and 01:14:457 (3) - NC? //no,I think it is now fine :O
01:21:098 (1) - ^ //^
01:33:737 (3) - add whistle?
01:33:951 (4) - remove whistle?
01:34:165 (1) - add whistle? //I try to add whistle to follow the vocals,so no change for these
01:47:662 (3) - add whistle? //k
01:48:840 (1) - spinner end 01:55:588 //k


自信ないので気にいらなかったら無視してください！
nice map ;D がんばって！

Fenya wrote: 2j44g

D.N.Angel:
00:00:630 - http://puu.sh/Gb20 ? o.o //no,I don't want to follow the vocals here
01:48:840 (1) - Finish in 01:55:588 //k

Mythol wrote: 5ly2d

[Angel]
Useless green line at 8439 offset //removed
00:08:476 - Change red line to Normal hitsound with 50% vol? //k
00:21:543 (3,4,5) - Change these to normal hitsound? remove whistle on 3 if you do o.o //um..no,I think mine is better :O
00:50:035 (5) - Why nc? //oh,removed
01:47:233 (1) - ^ //k

im so sleeeeepy :< //good night

Leorda wrote: 2f1c22

[Rare's Normal]
* AR +1?
00:21:115 (3) - Add finish at end slider?
00:43:180 (4) - Add finish at head slider?
01:41:877 (1) - Spacing here must 1,00x not 0,80x

Leorda wrote: 2f1c22

[D.N.Angel]
00:14:688 (4) - Add clap at tail slider?
01:13:386 (3) - Add whistle at tails slider?
01:14:028 (4) - Add clap


Good luck

nich95 wrote: 61h

D.N.Angel 515c6e

1. 00:47:779 - Unsnapped green line. Resnap to 00:47:786 //k
2. 01:47:876 (1) - I think that change is circle all for increasingly challenging. //no,I want to keep this ><

nich95 wrote: 61h

1. 00:47:779 - Unsnapped green line. Resnap to 00:47:786 //k

1. Probably add a silent sliderslide to S1 because some parts are too noisy.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 01:11:029 (1) - (design) I would change a slider style here if I were you, probably try this? I feel much better with this.
      
      suggestion and code

      
      

      144,100,71029,6,0,B|80:88|24:144|40:204,1,160,2|2

   2. 01:15:314 (2,3) - I don't recommend 1/2 click in easiest diff and since you don't put that much 1/2 in this diff so I highly suggest removing this, also consider the ability of newbie, changing this to 1/1 is the best way. Also for consistency to whole difficulty.
   3. 01:27:524 (5,1) - ^Same.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:30:755 (3) - How about removing the whistle here? I can't see any reason that a whislte is needed and it doesn't fit the music at all.
   2. 00:32:897 (2) - Probably add a S2 clap with 40% here to fit the music?
   3. 01:33:523 (x) - May I ask why you decide to reduce the volume here? I can't see a reason that you need to do it. How about removing this timing section?

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:43:608 (1) - nazi here, I would like to align the slider to the end of (4)- ,It will look much better after change.
   2. 01:09:101 (x) - I would place a note here if I were you because I can hear there is a drum sound, so a note there would be nice. Also if you add it, please change it to normal hitsound.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:29:470 (4) - How about changing to normal hitsound at the end of the slider? That's mean you only need to move 00:29:898 - this green line to 00:29:577 - .
   2. 01:03:960 (x) - Increase the volume from here? Since the whistle sound on the background music is louder than this.
   3. 01:12:315 (2) - Change it to normal hitsound at the beginning of the slider due to drum sound.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:111 (1,2,3,1) - (design) Imperfect square shape, "Create Polygon circle" function can help you though.
   2. 00:47:679 (1) - I feel like a jump here because I can see there is a accent point, a jump can fit the music perfectly well.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 01:19:598 (1) - Add a whistle at the beginning and the end of the slider respectively.

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:56:890 (8) - I feel like a new combo here and then remove the new combo at 00:57:319 - because the vocal start from 00:56:890 - .
   2. 01:11:029 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 經過試打之後, 總是感覺這段跳打起來不舒服, 原因可能是不定點間距, 但是這種間距用得不太好, 想這裡的話, 音樂沒甚麼變化, 用小間距對角跳 感覺就夠了, 太大間距反而有反效果.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 01:47:876 (1) - Change to normal hitsounds with 40% volume here and than back to soft hitsound at 01:48:411 - to fit the drum sound.

kanpakyin wrote: 5d1w6q

[D.N.Angel]

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:56:890 (8) - I feel like a new combo here and then remove the new combo at 00:57:319 - because the vocal start from 00:56:890 - .
      //唔，可是我NC都是放在長白線的說，而且00:57:319剛好有重音呢
   2. 01:11:029 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 經過試打之後, 總是感覺這段跳打起來不舒服, 原因可能是不定點間距, 但是這種間距用得不太好, 想這裡的話, 音樂沒甚麼變化, 用小間距對角跳 感覺就夠了, 太大間距反而有反效果. //我這裡是根據vocals放跳的。嘛，既然你說玩起來不順那我就改了~
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 01:47:876 (1) - Change to normal hitsounds with 40% volume here and than back to soft hitsound at 01:48:411 - to fit the drum sound.//k

Good luck.

kanpakyin wrote: 5d1w6q

As per your request:

[General]

1. Probably add a silent sliderslide to S1 because some parts are too noisy.

fixed

[Easy]

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 01:11:029 (1) - (design) I would change a slider style here if I were you, probably try this? I feel much better with this.
      
      suggestion and code

      
      

      144,100,71029,6,0,B|80:88|24:144|40:204,1,160,2|2

      fixed
      
   2. 01:15:314 (2,3) - I don't recommend 1/2 click in easiest diff and since you don't put that much 1/2 in this diff so I highly suggest removing this, also consider the ability of newbie, changing this to 1/1 is the best way. Also for consistency to whole difficulty.
      fixed
      
   3. 01:27:524 (5,1) - ^Same.
      fixed
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:30:755 (3) - How about removing the whistle here? I can't see any reason that a whislte is needed and it doesn't fit the music at all.
      fixed
   2. 00:32:897 (2) - Probably add a S2 clap with 40% here to fit the music?
      fixed
   3. 01:33:523 (x) - May I ask why you decide to reduce the volume here? I can't see a reason that you need to do it. How about removing this timing section?
      removed

[Hard]

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:36:111 (1,2,3,1) - (design) Imperfect square shape, "Create Polygon circle" function can help you though.
      fixed,remake~
   2. 00:47:679 (1) - I feel like a jump here because I can see there is a accent point, a jump can fit the music perfectly well.
      fixed,spacing to x1.20
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 01:19:598 (1) - Add a whistle at the beginning and the end of the slider respectively.
      fixed

Good luck.

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

AngelHoney

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

how to properly use jumps and spacing

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

[Easy]
01:32:666 (1) - offbeats might be hard for beginners, try starting the combo 1/2 earlier on the red tick either with an unstacked circle or making the slider repeat

fixed , add slider :3

[Hard]
00:53:249 (5) - i am sure you can find a place for this note that does not involve having to double the spacing to reach 6 afterwards

fixed , I make the spacing equal here

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

[DNA]
00:08:690 (1) - note is too soon after the end of a spinner //it is fine
00:38:681 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - why do you change spacing multiple times in the same combo?
00:40:181 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ^
00:43:394 (5) - spacing
00:45:965 (2) - ^
00:56:033 (2) - ^
00:58:604 (5) - ^
00:59:033 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
01:00:746 (1,2,3,4) - ^
01:11:029 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
01:14:457 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
01:16:385 (1,2,3,4) - ^
01:29:881 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
01:39:093 (3) - ^
01:40:806 (3,4) - ^
seriously though, go ask AngelHoney, 0108, ztrot, Odaril, or Blue Dragon about how to properly use jumps and spacing. I don't have time to lecture you while I'm in college but it is the one serious, glaring flaw in your map. Other than your spacing your map plays beautifully, is well-hitsounded, and fun. Your spacing is completely ruining it for you.

Jacob wrote: 4o6u3

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

AngelHoney

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

how to properly use jumps and spacing

Saturos-fangirl wrote: 336x59

I don't know why you think its okay to reject the most important part of my mod post and then ask me for a recheck. That's kind of rude.

xsrsbsns wrote: 2u6f59

some of the objects aren't very pretty due to the spacing changes.

AngelHoney wrote: 4q6t5d

to 01:07:602 - some jumps are a bit far for me (but its okay ?!

Garven wrote: 2k1v16

Did IRC modding on the other difficulties.

[DNA]
00:08:904 (2) - Um, why is this in 1/6? Should be 3 hits of 1/4 only. //25% of Playback Rate shows I should use 1/6 :O
00:36:753 (1,2,3,4) - I'd remove this stream since you've transitioned to a new part of the song. //yeah,you are right,fixed ~
00:37:610 (6,7,8) - I'm not seeing the reasoning behind the larger spacing here. //I fixed it after I saw AngelHoney's modding,I decreased the spacing for this part and I thought it was not that sudden,just emphasized vocals a bit :p
00:45:751 (1,2,3) - This spacing is pretty extreme compared to a lot of your previous jumps. It makes the transition to the 3 and 4 really poor. //I had fixed this but alacat didn't update my diff ;w;
00:57:319 (1,2) - Honestly, I'm surprised there isn't a jump here //^ haha ...
01:07:494 (9) - Delete //k
01:08:780 (5,7) - Delete //k
01:14:243 (1,2) - Gah, you have all of your 1/4 triples in the wrong places. Listen to the song. There are plenty of places that you can use these where it actually fits the song instead of just making random rhythms up. //but 25% of Playback Rate shows there are a 1/4 trplet ... T.T
01:24:418 (5) - Even when you're making up your own rhythms, this one plays and sounds just bad. //okey deleted
01:32:666 - I would prefer to have something to click here instead of just having it as a slider end. Reduces the impact too much. //alright
01:47:876 (1) - Instead of one long slider, maybe start a second slider at 01:48:304 - since the strings start up //hmm ... but I think my part is better :O

I'm more worried over the bad rhythm work rather than spacing, honestly. q: See if you can set your 1/4s to reflect what is in the music better! It will lead to a much more universally enjoyable map~

Garven wrote: 2k1v16

[DNA]
Please listen to that 1/6 part again more closely. There are four distinct notes (3 if you only count the drums) at 00:08:904 - 00:09:011 - 00:09:118 - and 00:09:225 - but the strings are so subtle it sounds best when the notes are like this:


Everything else looks good to me. Get that rhythm fixed up and we'll get this map moving.