By request
Gonna be extremely picky as requested :S
These are all my opinions and you have no obligation or what so ever to follow them word by word.
Legend
Bold, or black - just comments
Red - Flow
Blue - Blanket
Dark Green - Pattern/Stacking
Purple - Timing
Flow is highly up to the preference to the mapper, I'll still comment about them, but it's up to you if you really want to change your style of flow into my idea of what this map should flow like.
Acceptable
This is ok for me and should be used sometimes to avoid flow being too GENERIC and BORING.
Unacceptable
After 2, the flow is ruined since 2 drives the flow towards the bottom and the mapper is forced to put drastic change into the flow
[Normal]
00:06:960 (2) -
Right at this moment, the sound is dying, and the slider here doesn't fit
SPOILER
Instead of this,
Try this
or
be creativeee
00:11:324 (1,2) -
You can put two timing nodes between this and reduce the sound
00:55:462 (2) -
Blanket <3
01:00:883 (1) -
Blanket to 3
01:01:968 (3) -
Blanket
01:04:136 (2,3) -
flow, you might need to change 1's direction a bit so that you can have a nicer flow leading into 01:04:859 (4)
01:08:293 (5,6,1,2) -
Comment: Although they completely against the flow they are a good pattern so I'm not gonna be "mad" about thix
01:12:811 (3) -
Blanket
01:19:317 (3) -
Blanket
01:21:486 (3) -
Blanket
01:27:269 (3,4,5) -
You can make them curvy
01:30:161 (2,3) -
Blanket to each other
01:37:389 (6) -
Blanket
01:38:112 (1) - ^^
01:39:377 (3) - ^^
Flow from 01:34:498 (4)
to 01:45:161 (1)
is good
02:02:329 (3,4) - ^^
02:18:594 (1) -
You can improve the blanket by VERYYYYYYYYY LITTLE (minor issue)
02:21:486 (1) -
Blanket
02:31:426 (4) -
Blanket can be improvedNo problem with 2nd kiai time
03:39:197 (6,1) -
Flow here can seriously improve.
Just to point out: This is more like Normal+ diff.
Not going to point out flow in hard difficulty because that's what make it hard 
[Hard]
00:02:597 (1) -
Blanket
00:10:597 (5) - ^^
00:21:324 (3) - ^^
00:23:869 (3) - ^^
00:33:640 (6) -
You can blanket this better to the end of slider 4
00:35:085 (4) -
Blanketttt
00:42:269 (6) -
Can blanket better to the end of slider 5
00:46:426 (2) -
Blanket
00:56:727 (7) -
Blanket better to end of slider 5
00:58:172 (4) -
Blanket
01:01:968 (1) -
Blanket
01:02:510 (2) -
Can be improved by TINNNYYYYY bit (minor issue)
01:06:305 (1) -
Pls the blanket
01:07:389 (3) -
plsss
01:09:558 (3) -
More blanket
01:27:811 (3) -
Can be improved
01:30:703 (3) -
Definitely can be improved
01:39:377 (3,4,5) -
The flow feels way too weird to not to mention this
01:54:739 (5) -
Blanket daigzoku!
01:57:269 (7) -
Blanket
01:58:173 (1) -
Wow
02:01:968 (3) - ^^
02:02:691 (5) -
Blanket
02:05:221 (5) -
Slight improvement can be archived.
02:10:643 (4) -
Blanket
02:11:908 (7) - ^^
02:16:064 (2) - ^^
02:17:691 (7) - ^^
02:25:643 (5) - ^^
02:37:209 (4) - ^^
02:50:402 (1) -
What is this i don't even
02:53:293 (1) -
I can't think of a better solution for this but I still have to point this out
03:06:124 (4) -
Blanket
03:09:016 (3) - ^^
03:12:630 (5) - ^^
03:21:124 (4) - ^^
03:22:932 (3) - ^^
03:26:365 (3) - ^^
03:29:257 (1) - ^^
03:40:823 (4) - ^^
03:41:727 (3) -
Not hundred % sure about this though